Monday 27 January 2014

struggle and success draft 5 [final]


NAME:Aishwar

CLASS:1E1[PERSERVANCE 1]

DRAFT:5

                                Over come struggles and success

                 It was a Monday I was going to school nervously because it was the day which my English teacher say that he is going the tell the SA2 English marks for every one so I was nervous.

                   When I open my test paper I got a heart attack because I got 19 out of 100, it was a U grade. Then after school I went home with my my test paper. After my parents see my test paper the scolded me. From then onwards I decided to study hard but I did not know how to improve my English.

                    The next morning I went to school, when I reach school the first thing I did was to go to the staff where I can meet my English teacher.

                    When I approached another teacher to help me call my English teacher .the teacher told me that my English teacher was not in school so the end of the day I was going home without knowing how to improve my English

                      Then when I was on the way home I got an idea. The idea was about going to me tuition teacher’s house to ask for some tips on improving my English so as I though I approached my tuition teacher’s home and knock the door n call for my English teacher .then only my tuition  teacher’s neighbor told me that my teacher have gone out .

                        The next day I approach my English teacher and ask for some tips on improving on my English and he also gave me some tips. From that day onwards I followed all the tips and i though all the tips which my English teacher gave was enough so I didn’t approach my tuition teacher. And the next test my marks increase and for PSLE [Primary School Leaving Examination] I scored a “c”.  

struggle and success draft 4


            [Capitalizing]

             It was a Monday I was going to school nervously because I was the day which my English teacher say that he is going the tell the SA2 English marks for everyone so I was nervous.

             When I open my test paper I got a heart attack because I got 19 out f 100, it was a U grade. Then after school I went home with my test paper. After my parents see my test paper they scolded me. From then onwards I decided to study hard but I did not know how to improve my English.

               The next morning I went to school, when I reach school the first thing I did was to go to the staff room where I can meet my English teacher.

               When I approached another teacher to help me call my English teacher. The teacher told me that my English teacher was not in school so the end of the day I was going home without knowing how to improve my English.

                Then when I was on the way home I got an idea. the idea was about going to me tuition teacher’s house to ask for some tips on improving my English so as I though I approached my tuition teacher’s house and knock the door an  call for my English teacher .then only my tuition  teacher’s neighbor told me that my teacher have gone out .
                 The next day I approach my English teacher and as for some tips on improving on my English and he also gave me some tip. From that day onward I followed all the tip and i though all the tips which my English teacher gave was enough so I didn’t approach my tuition

struggle and success draft 3


           [Correcting words]

 it was a Monday I was going to school nervously because i was the day which my English teacher say that he is going the tell the SA2 English marks for everyone so I was nervous.

             When I open my test paper I got a heart attack because I got 19 out f 100, it was a U grad. then after school I went home with my test paper. after my parents see my test paper the scolded me. from then onwards I decided to study hard but I did not know how to improve my English.

               the next morning I went to school, when I reach school the firs thing I did was to go to the staff where I can meet my English teacher.

               when I approached another teacher to help me call my English teacher .the teacher told me that my English teacher was not in school so the end of the day I was going home without knowing how to improve my English.

                then when I was on the way home I got an idea. the idea was about going to me tuition teacher’s house to ask for some tips on improving my english so as I though I approached my tuition teacher’s house and knock the door an  call for my english teacher .then only my tuition  teacher’s neighbor told me that my teacher have gone out .

                 The next day I approach my english teacher and as for some tips on improving on my english and he also gave me some tip. from that day onward I followed all the tip and i though all the tips which my English teacher gave was enough so I didn’t approach my tuition teacher. And the next test my mark increased and for PSLE [Primary School Leaving Examination] I scored a “c”.  

struggle and success draft 2


            [Paragraphing]

 it was a Monda I was going to school nervousl because i was the day which my Englis teache say tha he is goin the tel th SA2 English marks for everone so I was nervous.

             When I open my tes paper I got a heart atack because I got 19 out f 100, it was a U grad. then after school I went home with my my test paper. after my parents see my test paper the scolded me. from then onwards I decided to study hard but I did not know how to improve my English.

               the next morning I went to school, when I reach school the firs thing I did was to go to the staff where I can meet my English teacher.

               when I aproached another teacher to help me call my English teacher .the techer told me that my English teacher was ot in school so the end of th day I was going home without knowing how to improve my English.

                then whe I was on the way home I got an idea. the idea was abou goin to me tuitio teacher’s hous to ask for some tips on improving my english so as I thoug I approache my tuition eacher’s hous and knock the door an  call for my english teacher .then onl my tuition  teacher’s neighbo told me tha my teacher have gone out .

                 The next day I aproach my english teacher and as for some tips on improving on my english and he also gave me some tip. from that day onward I followe all the tip and i though all the tips which my English teacher gave was enough so I didn’t approac my tuiti teaer. And the nex tes my mar increas and fo PSLE [Primary School Leaving Examination] I scored a “c”.  

struggle and success draft 1


it was a Monda I was going to school nervousl because i was the day which my Englis teache say tha he is goin the tel th SA2 English marks for everone so I was nervous.When I open my tes paper I got a heart atack because I got 19 out f 100, it was a U grad. then after school I went home with my my test paper. after my parents see my test paper the scolded me. from then onwards I decided to study hard but I did not know how to improve my English.the next morning I went to school, when I reach school the firs thing I did was to go to the staff where I can meet my English teacher. when I aproached another teacher to help me call my English teacher .the techer told me that my English teacher was ot in school so the end of th day I was going home without knowing how to improve my English.then whe I was on the way home I got an idea. the idea was abou goin to me tuitio teacher’s hous to ask for some tips on improving my english so as I thoug I approache my tuition eacher’s hous and knock the door an  call for my english teacher .then onl my tuition  teacher’s neighbo told me tha my teacher have gone out .The next day I aproach my english teacher and as for some tips on improving on my english and he also gave me some tip. from that day onward I followe all the tip and i though all the tips which my English teacher gave was enough so I didn’t approac my tuiti teaer. And the nex tes my mar increas and fo PSLE [Primary School Leaving Examination] I scored a “c”.  

 

story of file draft 4 [final draft]


Name: Aishwar

Class: 1E1

 Date: 10-01-14               

 Draft 4

                 

                                        The Story of the File.

                  It was a Monday. I was brought to a shop from a file making place to sell me. I was going to the shop in a lorry.

                  After reaching the shop, I was brought to a dark room and left there with the other files. The   next day, I was taken out of the box and put on the shelf.  Then after awhile a young lady wearing shorts and Justin Bieber t-shirt approached me and took me and put me in her basket. Then straight she approached the counter to pay money for me and the other things in the basket

                   I was put in a plastic bag and brought to a house; I think it is the young lady’s house. After entering the house the lady took me out of the plastic bag and gave me to a girl, I think it is her daughter. Her daughter brought me to her to room and wrote some kind of words. I think is her name and her class name

                   The next day, she brought me to her school and file all her worksheets in me. And from that day she loaded me with worksheets almost everyday. From that day almost everyday my weight  increase  so  I cried but no tears came and I got angry but the file didn’t turn red .Thank god, at the end of the year she unloaded me so I was very happy .Then I was left in the shelf for a year and again she used me. Then after she used me again I was broken so she recycled me

story of file draft 3


              [Correcting words]

                  It was a Monday. I was brought to a shop from a file making place to sell me. I was going to the shop in a lorry.

                  After reaching the shop, I was brought to a dark room and left there with the other files. The   next day, I was taken out of the box and put on the shelf.  Then after awhile a young lad wearing shorts and Justin Bieber t-shirt approached me and took me and put me in her basket. Then straight she approached the counter t pay money for me and the other things in the basket.

                  I was put in a plastic bag and brought to a house; I think it i the young lady’s house. After entering the house the lady took me out of the plastic bag and gave me to a girl, I think it is her daughter. Her daughter brought me to her to room and wrote some kind of words. I think is her name and her class.

                 The next day, she brought me to her school and file all her worksheets in me. And fro that day she loaded me with worksheets almost everyday. From that day almost everyday my weight  increase  s  I cried but no tears cam and I got angry but the file didn’t turn red .Thank god, at the end of the year she unloaded me s I was very happy .Then I was left in the shelf for a year and again she used me. Then after she used me again I was broke so she recycled me

 

story of file draft 2


                  [Paragraphing]

It was a Monday. I was brough to a sho from a file making place to sell me. I was going to the shop in a lorry.

                  After reaching the shop, I was brough to a dark rom and left ther with the other files. Th   next day, I was taken out of the box and put on the shelf.  hen after awhile a young lad wearing shorts and Justin Bieber t-shirt approache me and took me and put me in he basket. Then straight she approached the counter t pay money for me and the othe things in the basket.

                  I was put in a plastic bag and brought to a house; I think it i the young lady’s house. After enterin the house the lady took me out of th plastic bag and gave me to a girl, I think it is her daughter. Her daughter brough me to her to room and wrote some kind of words. I think is her name and her clas.

                 The next day, she brought me to he school and file all her worksheets in me. And fro that day she loaded me with worksheets almost everyday. From that da almost everyday my weight  increase  s  I cried bu no tears cam and I got angr but the file didn’t turn red .Thank god, at the end of the year she unloaded me s I was very happy .Then I was left in the shelf for a year and again she used me. Then after she used me again I was broke so she recycled me

 

story of file draft 1


It was a Monday. I was brough to a sho from a file making place to sell me. I was going to the shop in a lorry. After reaching the shop, I was brough to a dark rom and left ther with the other files. Th   next day, I was taken out of the box and put on the shelf.  hen after awhile a young lad wearing shorts and Justin Bieber t-shirt approache me and took me and put me in he basket. Then straight she approached the counter t pay money for me and the othe things in the basket. I was put in a plastic bag and brought to a house; I think it i the young lady’s house. After enterin the house the lady took me out of th plastic bag and gave me to a girl, I think it is her daughter. Her daughter brough me to her to room and wrote some kind of words. I think is her name and her clas. The next day, she brought me to he school and file all her worksheets in me. And fro that day she loaded me with worksheets almost everyday. From that da almost everyday my weight  increase  s  I cried bu no tears cam and I got angr but the file didn’t turn red .Thank god, at the end of the year she unloaded me s I was very happy .Then I was left in the shelf for a year and again she used me. Then after she used me again I was broke so she recycled me

biography


1) Name: Aishwar

2) Class: 1E-1

3) Hobbies: Sleeping and watching dramas because it is the only thing that is easy

4) Favourite Color: Green  because the colour  is good  for  eyes

5) Favourite Food: Nasi Briyani  because it is very tasty

6) Something interesting about myself: I like to do things          different from others  because I  can learn more things

7) Best Friend: Roshan Ravichandran  because he help me in homework

8) Life in Primary School: Favourite teacher ( Mdm Fairus )  because she  helps me with vocabulary

9) Favorite Subject: Science because I  can learn interesting things

10) Expectation of Secondary School: To be a good student.